Need honest opinions of lovemaking scene…well almost…for my book here is a bite…but only a bite!

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She glided towards him so close she could smell the metallic sweat smell floating above his chest hair. Unable to see his face she mentally out lined his body with his scent. He was nervous and excited but tried not to show the fear of what she was causing him to feel. The closer she got the fast his heart raced. He could smell the sweetness of her breath. So close but not touching. Tingling of static energy between their bodies. The arousal without  having the contact. They could feel each pleasure the other was wishing to do.  There fate was to be together the only thing holding them back was the chains attached to their legs.

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  1. Pingback: Beyond precious: Words to describe love. | In The Bed Inside Me.

  2. Writing love scenes is tough. Writing is supposed to be about your experiences, and yet that doesn’t seem good and writing about others feels a bit creepy. I guess that’s when imagination kicks in?
    Still I understand the dilemma.
    Really like your blog.
    Nikki

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  3. Very nice! This is tasteful and loaded with tons of sexual tension, desire, and in a romantic fashion, not purely physical. The rewrite on this will be POWERFUL! Not knowing the backstory handcuffs me a bit. There are a couple of things to tweak in the rewrite, but I’d keep moving forward with this.

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